Talk:Durahn (5e Race)

For this race's trait-only review:

• Blindsight range is too much. Blindsight as it is is supposed to be a limited resource for players. Adding it eats up space for other traits since balance. For races that do use blindsight, see wording from stuff like Plaguespreader (5e Race), which makes you blind outside the radius. Reduce it to maybe 60 feet.
• For wording trait proficiency, it's usually "You are proficient in" rather than "you gain proficiency in" since the latter is more related to class training granting you the proficiency rather than having it as an innate racial thing.
• aaa is a placeholder I guess? Be sure to delete if complete!
• Conditions like poison should be linked like {{5c|poisoned}}. Be sure to specify saving throws, not just throws.
• Tracking sting should require an action and a weapon attack to use. And maybe you should gain advantage in tracking the marked target instead of the set distance?
• For aerial anatomy, since it gives you climb speed and increased movement, I think you can move flight altogether to 5th level, and give them unmitigated flight there, since that is the level third level spells like fly are gained for fullcasters.
• The random height and weight tables should be below the traits usually. Also, unless there is a significant difference in height or weight, I think one table suffices. But that's just me.
• Carapace trait wording can be simplified, but it's also fine as it is.
• Underground enhancement reads a bit too casual and is overpowered. Burrowing speed is actually quite powerful since it allows a player to get full cover easily. I suggest something like the wording of the digging traits of the Rakaka (5e Race) or dao subrace of the Genie (5e Race)'s earth glide. The blindsight shouldn't be extended.
  

Everything else in the traits seems good! I can help with linking, formatting or wording if you need so just give me a holler, as I have this page on my watchlist :)--Yanied (talk) 20:28, 22 May 2020 (MDT)

Hey Yanied!!! Thank you so much for the meticulous review!!! I am sorry for the wait, I wasn't able to be online yesterday!

Blindsight. I saw you have already edited this trait. Thank you for doing it and for explaining it to me!

Wording. You are proficient in x you gain proficiency in, got it! I'll sure be careful when writing my next race's traits!!

aaa. Yes, it was just a placeholder, thank you for the attentive eye.

Poison. Thank you again :]

Tracking sting. Just checked your editing, and wow that was very detailed, I really appreciate it! I am sure I wouldn't be able to edit it that way haha

Aerial anatomy. Thanks for the info!!

Random height and weight tables. The reason why I divided it into 3 separate tables is because of the aerial anatomy of skyseekers, which makes them lighter than the others, and the bulky carapace of underpassers, which makes them much heavier, though height does not vary much. Do you think I should keep it that way or merge them?

Carapace trait. <3

Underground enhancement. I just loved what you wrote in it, it is much better than before, I was thrilled by it!

As a last help with the traits, I would like to know if you have any thoughts for a trait for the coastclaimers. I aimed to make each of the subraces balanced between each other but following their characteristics. Skyseekers winged bodies make them light and stealthy, underpassers have hardened bodies and abilities that help them underground. But I could not decide on a trait that equally equilibrates them, coastclaimers are more adaptable and have even farther intellectual capacities, I was thinking about a trait that showed their adaptability body skills, maybe like camouflage or something that merged them with the environment they are placed. Another option would be a trait that displayed their faster pace learning, though I do not understand how learning new things work in d&d gameplay, and depending on how it is, it would be better traded for the Sharp Recollector trait than added. What do you think?

Thank you so much again for your time and attention, it was really kind of you to make all the alterations for me and to give me such detailed information. --KyluaHayes (talk) 20:28, 24 May 2020 (MDT)

No problem! The size tables aren't that much of an issue. As for the coastclaimers, it is true they are slightly underpowered in comparison to the skyseekers. Since you focus on their mental capabilities, you can choose to capitalize on it. Something like "Sharp Recollector" to give them perfect memory up to a certain range in time sounds good! For reference, the flyer subrace of the devil gear race has a trait like that.--Yanied (talk) 13:06, 24 May 2020 (MDT)

Thank you so much, Yanied, you are incredible! :] Well, all related to the traits were analyzed, but I would sure be glad to know what you think of the race in general now. If there is something missing, and I would love to have your help with flavoring it. Thank you again, and bye for now :]

No problem. I think the race is mechanically sound. Save for the empty table and image placeholder, the page looks complete. It is an interesting insectoid race and your fluff is very nice.--Yanied (talk) 22:04, 24 May 2020 (MDT)