Talk:Way of Void (5e Subclass)

"Spend 3 ki points as a reaction to dodge all attacks until your next turn. " - this should state what the actual trigger is for the reaction; and "dodge" isn't defined.

Is it: "When you are the target of an attack, you can spend 3 ki points to use your reaction to have that attack miss you. In addition, all other attacks made against you automatically miss until the start of your next turn."?

That is really powerful.

I'm looking a bit further at this. We have things like:

Altered

• "You become immune to necrotic and psychic damage at level 11. " - should probably say "at level 11 in this class"
• "By comprehending what you've seen..." - Proficiency at 3rd level is +2. Wisdom modifier could be +4. That gives 3 skills. Why not just say you get 3 skills. "If you are already proficient in the skill double it." - this needs writing out properly, if you mean something like Expertise. You don't just "double" a skill.

Distorted

• "Gain Advantage when making saves." - this surely cannot be all the time.
• 5e doesn't have "free actions", you just say this can happen at the beginning of your turn. The psychic damage needs a bit of rewriting for clarity, I had to re-read it four times before I understood it. The additional dice, I think, should be a set value instead of based on your proficiency; and the DC should be based on your proficiency, not a set value.

Warped

• "All rolls using Intelligence or Wisdom against you are made with disadvantage while you have advantage against them and at level 17 they automatically fail. "

• "All rolls" is too nebulous. What is an "intelligence roll made against you"? At 17th level, do perception checks made to spot you automatically fail? That's crazy powerful.
• "You can blink across space" - the 5e keyword is teleport. c.f. misty step.

Unnatural

• "For one action you can activate "Presence of Madness" as an action." :(
• "The skill itself... " This is a class feature, not a skill
• "costs no ki points but each point deals..." - makes no sense
• DC should be based on proficiency
• Doesn't explain what "driven mad" means

Overall, this archetype gives multiple features at each level where you would gain one feature; and each feature is hugely powerful. Marasmusine (talk) 08:14, 16 April 2017 (UTC)

Some gradual improvements.

The main issue is, you need to decide what to remove. This archetype is getting way too much stuff. Look at the monastic traditions in the PHB.

For example, at 3rd level, all the PHB traditions get one new thing they can do with ki points. Your "Altered" section gives three very powerful features at 3rd level.

Once we know what is being kept, we can take a better look at the wording (did you look at misty step? Can you spot what important wording is missing from Illusion Phase?)Marasmusine (talk) 14:04, 16 April 2017 (UTC)

If you're not sure how to do this, let me know and I'll rewrite this for you pro bono. Marasmusine (talk) 14:09, 16 April 2017 (UTC)

Okay, good, we've narrowed down on the features you'd like to keep. It still needs rewriting. As I say, I can do this for you if you like. Marasmusine (talk) 18:07, 16 April 2017 (UTC)

If you want to change it go ahead mate. im frazzled