Talk:Mazohk (5e Race)

Made suggested changes as best I could. Any further? --Max7238 (talk) 14:15, 28 March 2019 (MDT)

Yeah a few things but it is looking much better, if need to know the right wording for something check the first party books or the sites Musicus Meter:

• Use feet/foot instead of ft.
• Make sure to add in a calculation for the saving throw (like the Dragonborns breath weapon) and include the spellcasting ability for some of these spells.
• Earth Wall is pretty overly wordy and is reminiscent of those higher-level wall spells. Granting a free casting of the shield spell that takes the form of an earthen wall surging up and protecting the user would be flavorful/strong. Long rest recharge though as shield is really good as a racial.
• Maybe Melting Shadow should use some sort of use like bonus action/ reaction as it is better than the swashbucklers feature and makes life as a rogue way too ease.
• Eyes Within The Mana should probs be a free casting of the detect magic spell rather than giving something like blindsight to a PC. Remember that's about as good as the rogues 14th level feature.
• Falling Skies shouldn't have a range of 500 feet, the call lightning spell only has a range of 120 feet and a d12 damage makes this the strongest cantrip. Two ways to may it more balanced would be to cut the damage and range to be on par with other offensive cantrips or cut the range, up the damage and make it single use (breath weapon scaling).
• Couterspell should not be on a short rest recharge
• Breathe Clearly should use the same wording as the water breathing spell.

That's all for now. —ConcealedLight (talk) 04:14, 29 March 2019 (MDT)

Fixed the foot/feet thing. Added the missing saving throws / spellcasting abilities (I think I got them all). Earth Wall remained; others are just as complex, and it's supposed to be mildly reminiscent of wall spells, though I realized I forgot to add the number of uses and recharge. Melting Shadow was edited for clarity, and requires action economy now. Changed Gen'qen's trait to Detect Magic with recharge; their thing in the book was pretty strong, but then all these clans are toned down for use in 5e, so the repeated changes have been for the best. Falling Skies now mirrors a Dragonborn breath weapon, for the most part. Breathe Clearly edited for clarity.

As for Counterspell... If a Warlock can do it, and Gen'qen using Dispel Magic is ok, I see no reason to change it. It's the negation of a single spell per combat, and the user doesn't even know what spell they're trying to stop. --Max7238 (talk) 01:19, 30 March 2019 (MDT)